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View Poll Results: Is the draft of my story good? | |||
10- Brilliant! | 0 | 0% | |
9- Just short of Brilliant | 0 | 0% | |
8- It was Great | 2 | 22.22% | |
7- Just short of Great | 1 | 11.11% | |
6- It was OK | 0 | 0% | |
5- It was alright but.. meh. | 4 | 44.44% | |
4- It could have been better.. | 0 | 0% | |
3- It could have been ALOT better.. | 1 | 11.11% | |
2- Oh my god you need to learn how to write! | 0 | 0% | |
1- Are you sh*tting ME!? THAT SUX! | 1 | 11.11% | |
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10-14-2008, 02:26 PM | #1 | |||
Behold the Neep!
Nation: Neepolito Harnilito Current Wars | Foreign Aid Discord name: VanikHardil Alliance: bjalbert Join Date: Oct 2008
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First 4 pages of my History
Well after most of the things that happened between me and The Legion i decided to start writing Neepolito Harnilito's history while it was still fresh in my mind, here is a rough draft of the first four pages, let me know what you think and please vote.
The History of Neepolito Harnilito By Vanik Hardil 10/6/2008 7:56:49 Pm Neepolito Harnilito was founded by Vanik Hardil, an American from Ohio one of the states in Northern America.
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10-14-2008, 07:36 PM | #2 | |
The Legion's Resident Pikachu
Nation: Arcadian Empire Current Wars | Foreign Aid Discord name: Arcadian Join Date: Feb 2008
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
* Arcadian thinks someone copied the marking schedule from his "Rate My Story!" thread
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10-14-2008, 07:52 PM | #3 | |
Das Soldat
Nation: southwest america Current Wars | Foreign Aid Join Date: Oct 2008
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
For a draft its ok.
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10-14-2008, 07:57 PM | #4 | ||||
Behold the Neep!
Nation: Neepolito Harnilito Current Wars | Foreign Aid Discord name: VanikHardil Alliance: bjalbert Join Date: Oct 2008
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thanks Laskaris, i plan on going back and improving once every 20 pages. this way i can go from "OK draft" to "Awesome draft"
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10-14-2008, 08:06 PM | #5 | |
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
It mentions me. It's awesome.
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10-14-2008, 08:11 PM | #6 | |
Das Soldat
Nation: southwest america Current Wars | Foreign Aid Join Date: Oct 2008
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
He needs to put more depth into the conflict and events building to it.It would have been awsome if he would have GOTTEN MY NATION'S NAME RIGHT!
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10-14-2008, 08:12 PM | #7 | |||
Behold the Neep!
Nation: Neepolito Harnilito Current Wars | Foreign Aid Discord name: VanikHardil Alliance: bjalbert Join Date: Oct 2008
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
lol i was worried when i seen you didnt vote, also might i add i was only going to put your name as Lincon Grad but my spellchecker just wouldent leave it alone so i put it as Lincoln.
and im glad you like it, and soon you will be re-appearing in it
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10-14-2008, 08:16 PM | #8 | |
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
Heheh. Fair enough.
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10-14-2008, 08:17 PM | #9 | |||
Behold the Neep!
Nation: Neepolito Harnilito Current Wars | Foreign Aid Discord name: VanikHardil Alliance: bjalbert Join Date: Oct 2008
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
also, whoops Laskaris, when i was writing and checking the names of the nations i could have swore your nation was South America, sorry
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10-15-2008, 11:12 AM | #10 | |||
The Prodigy Child
Nation: Bilginin Current Wars | Foreign Aid Discord name: Midas|AESIR Alliance: ÆSIR Join Date: Feb 2008
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Re: First 4 pages of my History
Oh boy, imagine how long mine would be if I tried this....
Maybe about 20 pages long, taking 4 days to write? Anyway, good read. I'd like to see some more added onto it.
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