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sojourner
07-10-2011, 12:16 PM
I awaken to that same old thing,daily drudgery we call life.

Same towel, same toothbrush, same job, same car and wife.

The hours spent are just the same, I push myself to wake.

I wish that things were different, this is more than I can take.

I climb on out of bed and think “here we go again”, and yet

I know it wont be any different, never is, on this you can bet.

Now I get into my car and follow the same streets and roads

and through the same as yesterday day my weary mind implodes.

Talk to me old man, you there with the deep lightless eyes

and help me find a reason to continue to ignore the cries

From all those who want to hurt me, steal this time away.

Talk to me old man, and tell me a good reason I need to stay.

Well, he started with a toothless grin and a voice so mellow

Why do you blame others for your unhappy life young fellow.

You are your own destiny, you control all that happens here,

At 102 years old I am about to die but I have no fear.

Take each day that you are graciuosly given and waste it not,

Today is what we want it to be, no more, no less, no “I forgot.”

Stop your whining and make time to see all the beauty you can

I was given a long happy life, but you may die tomorrow, young man.

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It’s raining ,you say

I hadn’t noticed

my wet shoes hold

onto the pavement

like velcro

the only place to go

is home, and there

is no one there, oh

a warm body greets

my weary wanna be

self, yet I am alone

Careful! you may

get too honest

and stand here

in the rain ’til

morning, and

morning

never

comes

Domingo the Honored
07-10-2011, 12:22 PM
1. Kill yourself?
2. Get new things and file for divorce.
3. Get a new job and new hobbies.
4. Do things differently.
5. Don't get out of bed, or don't think that.
6. See number 4.
7. See number 2 and number 4.
8. See number 4.
9. Yes, go closer, hope he's not a pedophile
10. Pedophiles are not that intelligent or philosophical!
11. The man needs to brush his teeth and stop with the hockey and dipping.
12. Because he's a sad, accusatory SOB?
13. ONE HUNDRED AND FUCKING TWO? HOW? HOW?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
14. Advice worth listening to.
15. Yep, he's actually worth a dime, shocking.
16. Couldn't have said it better myself.
17. Why is he toothless and 102 then? OWTF.


The second poem is nice.

(also, sojo, I like the first one too, I'm mostly just messing with you... I'm just a little tired with the whiny sad characters who don't have intelligence enough to change the life they're so bored with, but that's not you.)

boilpoil
09-03-2011, 11:50 PM
The second one is definitely better than the first one. The biggest 'mistake' is you used "well,", which is rather common in stories only, and I didn't feel much when reading the first one, the second one is good, at least I feel something

Legionnaire
09-04-2011, 02:08 AM
you can be a poet if you want to!